Tawang, this snow like forgotten widowhood
Speaks very little. You do not expect warmth there.
Only the shivering remains of our unholy sins
Only the tepid prayers of these doubtful monks
Can rid you of your manly fears. In Tawang.
There, you want to be young again.
And my mother spoke in silent whispers
Making lukewarm gestures to the Buddha
Tawang, only the staring rocks, the screeching wind
Can remind you of your sublime male fears.
Tawang. There, you do not question the law of the land
You do not engage in idle talk of life and death.
In Tawang, only fear will show you the angry sun
And only the silent waters of this promised land
The white mirage of this cruel earth
Draw you to this forgotten pilgrimage. In tawang.
Nice poem, full of images that make one fresh. I specially love the 2nd paragraph for its rich visuals and emotions expressed with a skill hand..
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love ds portion....
"Tawang, this snow like forgotten widowhood"..
the 'this'...cud it go into ellipsis?ie
Tawang, snow like forgotten widowhood
again...
"In Tawang, only fear will show you the angry sun" here...since Tawang has just been mentioned may b u cud put it this way..--
(In Tawang), only fear will show you the angry sun
[just suggetsions though :-)]this ones a li'l different from d immediately preceding ones i hv read....gud..after all as i had told sombody.."dont move round in circles...move up in d rotating gyre calld life!!"
slight correction--i hd meant --
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Tawang.Snow like forgotten widowhood
Anurag Your poem enfolds those regions that remain hidden most of the time when we are in this hard world. You poem leads us to a plane of peculiar consciousness that we envisage in deep meditation. More a clue to some higher plane: of Subtle(Sookshm Chetna) or Mental(mana Chetana) Consciousness or even higher ....
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thanks everone :)
ReplyDeletewonderful imagination,realistic with crystal clear picture of tawang..
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